i think the lack of contrast and illegibility makes it a lacking design. some recs —

• try gaussian blurring the background for the top one
• make the eye graphic smaller (it’s really good and nice) so that it doesn’t get covered with the text, making it hard to read.
• making the black softer would be better
• the entire graphic and text are both dark. try making the text a lighter shade of red, or making the black softer